Tell me what you really think.
Oh my. It makes my head hurt.
There's your basic stream of consciousness. I like the way punctuation is no longer an issue. Today's youth has made it so much easier, by replacing everything with commas. How...precious.
Ok, I actually thought that that was comic genius, especially the last line. But this student was serious?
Oy.
Actually, I love it!
Then again, I'm a huge "Princess Bride" fan. Not to mention that I've written more than my share of stream of consciousness bits.
Of course, I don't publish them...
It's really Morpheus syndrome.
Yeah, it's almost a Zen koan. And I do have to give the author props for the Princess Bride references.
WF
andre the giant... I was a big fan as a kid... hey, doesn't that make it HISTORY, kind of like Teddy? LOL!!
I'm stunned. Don't know whether it would be polite to laugh or not.
Poor Ted Kennedy, all this time he thought his brothers were dead not him.
Heh. And here I thought my little kitty Buddah, were he human, would be the kind of the Run On Sentence...
And wouldn't you think Morphine Syndrome would be painless?
I love it! It makes me feel so much better.
And I agree that I was a little surprised to see Teddy Kennedy was killed in the middle of a parade. Is your student psychic?
Oh. My. God. I don't know whether to laugh or cry.
I'm glad I didn't read that until this morning. I don't mind spraying coffee all over, but last night it would have wasted perfectly respectable Merlot.
Um, what was the topic?
Marfan's syndrome? Compare-and-contrast a wrestler and a U.S. President? Open up your brain and let whatever falls out onto the paper, fall?
I particularly like the line about Lincoln's wife being a "spendthrift nutter."
As for the death thing: Yeah, Andre was probably taken down by his own body, but I kind of sort of thought Lincoln was, you know, assassinated?
Stream of consciousness plus unintentional surrealism, beloved by all literati with soft hands.
Or concentrated weirdness a la Hunter S Thompson or Francis E Dec Esq.
Tell me it ain't so....
There's a fine line between genius and pure stupidity. This essay is probably the best example of what happens when you cross that line.
You know, sometimes I think you are a genius and you are making this all up to amuse us.
That is so wierd. If it is really for an assignment I can't imagine what the assignment was, let alone begin correcting the grammatical errors. If it is something for a comdey show, ala the likes of George Carlin I can maybe laugh a little.
"And the winner of our mysterious essay contest is little Bobby K. from tent 3 who guessed "some kind of meat." Congratulations, Bobby, you've just won yourself a brand new Chrysler Cordova!" (crowd cheers wildly). Actually, I think a Lincoln Towncar (for big and tall people like AtG) would be more appropriate. And you could have a morphine drip for that syndrome. WOW! BTW, was this JrHS, HS or Comm College level profundity? -cp
I have just one word for this: edit. Edit. EDIT. Lordy, have these students not covered "How to edit your paper so you don't sound like a jabbering moron?" I believe it was taught somewhere along the junior year of highschool way back in the '80s.
It is Marfan's syndrome that Lincoln has. It causes abnormaly long bones and very serious cardiac issues. I don't believe Andre had Marfan's. I think he had genuine giantism. (As opposed to the fake giantism seen in people wearing elevator shoes and extra tall hats.) We have a patient at our office with Marfans. This precious girl is 10 years and is about 5'8" now. She has cardiac problems, horrible joint pain, and difficulty walking.
I think this student might have had Morphine syndrome though. Maybe he/she just didn't take the daily dose of Ritalin though.
Bless you, Mamacita. Bless you.
I an winded just reading this!! Now if you want to read some really wonderful writing, I just posted SugarPlum's essay on Fall. My little girl would make you proud!
Oh, my GAWD! Anyone who ends with a Princess Bride reference earns my undying love, if also an F.
But hey, you gotta take the rough with the smooth, right?
Genius. Genius wrapped up in stream-of-consciousness John Dos Passos J. Alfred Prufrock word vomit kind of ways....
No?
my eyes kept searching and searching for that period, to no avail whatsoever. this might be why they were so teary by the time i got to the end of the post. spendthrift nutter, indeed! soldier on, dear mamacita!
Holy run-on sentences, Batman!
Appropriate for a journal? Yes
Appropriate for a reference piece? You know, before the rough draft, so you have something to refer to while writing? Maybe. Facts should be checked before continuing on.
Appropriate to hand in as the final draft? Definately not.
Scary
Did anyone see a period? I checked twice and didn't find one. Is this really college level? Remedial? Made my head hurt, but made my heart hurt more.
You're right. Lincoln's suspected abnormality was Marfan's Syndrome. Andre the Giant was completely different; a pituitary growth hormone problem. In adults, after the growth plates close, it is known as acromegaly.
Bless you for even trying to grade or critique this. I feel like I should dig out my high school writing papers and send you a real "compare and contrast" essay; if only to help your head quit hurting and to keep you from jumping off the "firly brinkmire".
Oh. My. Gob. What ARE they doing in those high school English classes?!?!
Speaking of run-on sentences.....LOL
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