the only problem when writing these stories is that one has to really have the reader guessing, and the reader is so ready to suspect that all is not as it seems.
very good, and you had me during the train scene. later it gets a little easier to figure out - i say keep the reader guessing awhile longer.
otherwise - great

correction - a pack of dogs nearly mauled my friend dead.
SEV | Homepage | 06.01.05 - 4:10 pm | #

I'll try, Satish. I really will.

And my bad, does anybody get mauled alive?!
Rohit | Homepage | 06.01.05 - 11:14 pm | #

Very interesting. Loved it and the twist.

Hello, Michele sent me
Dawn | Homepage | 06.02.05 - 7:30 am | #

Great story! Keep it Up!

Good Luck

Mark
Mark | Homepage | 06.02.05 - 4:22 pm | #

Halfway through the story the words "my friends" had me suspicious. But I kept thinking "Cat?" Nice.
Rajesh J Advani | Homepage | 06.02.05 - 8:28 pm | #

Good one! I never could guess the ending!
praveen | Homepage | 06.03.05 - 8:27 am | #

I agree, you keep the reader guessing by making us think we're getting something other than what you offer. Skillfully done!
W. S. Cross | Homepage | 06.07.05 - 10:53 am | #